Daniqua Polk
Karen Morris
Eng 1102- HH
16 February 2011
Process Reflection
After writing my first draft I felt my writing could use a lot more improvement. My vocabulary could have been lengthened,expanded, and simple grammar mistakes could have been avoided. Being my first draft I didn’t have a format of the proper direction I was going to go in, and ended up having to start all over. My paper was not in a bad shape, and the format I choose was doing my introduction, stating my thesis, and the opposition really helped the flow of my paper. Besides have to start a whole new draft, I change who my opposition would be. after reading my article and receiving my grade i realized the argument i was trying to convey was not reflected to my audience. Instead of talking about an individual group I used the audience of the whole United States and compared it to another country.
Choosing a topic was very difficult. I tried to find an aspect that an opposition could be form involving sex trafficking, but many people agreed on all the negative aspects of it being wrong no matter what country. Looking at the research I did for my wikis showed me I was not researching deep in the subject of sex trafficking. Much of my postings was based on what sex trafficking was and how the victims are affected by this issue. I had to do a deeper research on rights of victims, types of trafficking, pro and cons of sex trafficking, how are men and women affected differently, and what are some top places that trafficking occurs.
In creating my thesis statement I took the directions of comparing the legal rights of women and children in the United States to foreign countries. In doing the research it was some difficulties in finding similar human rights for both sides, and understanding the different governments outside of the United States. Some of the laws in countries like Thailand were dated, and I had to research the new revisions and add-ons to previous laws against traffickers.
In my work I held the most confidence in being able to structure my paper to flow cohesively. I think I did a great job on staying within my topic and providing justification for my points. My paper on the other hand held a lot of places that needed improvements. I big issue I need improvement on is grammatical errors. Simple things like placing a comma in the appropriate place, and spelling could have been eliminated from my essay. I also need help with transitional words and phrases in my essay. I would like to see myself come out of this class from being a good writer to a great writer. One of my difficulties in this class with working on this paper was really trying to figure out my style of writing and remain consistent throughout my writing.
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